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Short Story -- From the Heart (self.writing)

submitted 1 year ago* (last edited 1 year ago) by branflakes1413 to c/writing

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Hello,

As the title says this is a short story that I have been slowly working on for a few years. I've stopped and come back to it many, many times. But I think it's time for it to be shared again or else it won't (and I won't!) get any better.

So, please, I invite you to tear it apart. Any feedback would be welcome. I'm not sure how it works, since I'm still new here, but if you'd prefer to send a DM instead of leaving a comment you may do so!

Edit: Sorry for the formatting. It was too big for a single post or comment so I had to split it into 4 parts. It should all be chained together within the first comment. (Sort comments by Old)

Synopsis:

{This is a standalone piece.}

A mysterious love letter leads a man on a road to self-discovery.

#writing #shortstory #fiction

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[–] branflakes1413 1 points 1 year ago* (last edited 1 year ago)

Could you go into a bit more detail about what specifically doesn’t work? I want to take notes and see what I can do to make it better.

Haha, yes years. As in it started as a micro-story assignment in college. It sat on my google drive for 4 years so I decided to flesh it out. It’s not necessarily something I normally like to write. But for some reason I just can’t stop nudging it, come back to it to edit or add/remove every so often. It’s not a constant 4 years of working on one small short story! That’s nuts lol.