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Embellishment (A Poem for Thee) (self.writing)

submitted 1 year ago by Humanoid to c/writing

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Thou art coral-red & blue; constellation
of desires, dance of spring-youth
& time-worn winter alike—
Thou art right
as a bright moon upon a starry night!

Come, fine friend, combine
thine amethyst love with mine,
so I might mine garnets
from thy mind
& find thy diamonds thus thrice divine!

Whilst I, sapphire as I may be,
sleep sublime submerged in sea,
& seek out olive peridot,
yellow & green—
Scenes of opaline moonstone dreams!

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[–] kalanggam 3 points 1 year ago (1 children)

What a beautiful poem. Love the rhythm of it, and this alliteration

sleep sublime submerged in sea

adds such a nice luster to the whole piece!

[–] Humanoid 2 points 1 year ago

Thank you! I've been out of practice for several years, but this one jumped out of me a couple months ago. I had a lot of fun playing with the colors and sound in this poem!

[–] JuniperusVox 3 points 1 year ago (1 children)

I adore this. It feels like a dwarven love poem.

[–] Humanoid 2 points 1 year ago

Hahaha, that thought hadn't occurred to me but you're totally right! That gives me a delightful new way to read it, thank you!

[–] koala@latte.isnot.coffee 2 points 1 year ago

Wonderful work, it flows off the tongue beautifully.